This is what happens when your opt-in form has bad copy:
- People don’t understand what you can give them (so why would they sign up?)
- Your offer is less interesting than plain white rice that is somehow also beige
- They never even notice your offer in the first place
Getting people to come to your website is hard. And if you can’t get your website visitors to turn into leads, it’s a massive waste of time.
Let’s do some quick (not scary, I promise) math.
- Scenario One: Your website gets 1000 visitors a week, with a conversion rate of 0.5%. That’s 5 subscribers per week. If you know you can convert 10% of your subscribers into customers, that’s 1 new customer every two weeks.
- Scenario Two: Your website gets 1000 visitors a week, with a conversion rate of 2%. That’s 20 subscribers per week. If you know you can convert 10% of your subscribers into customers, that’s 2 new customers every week.
These are fake numbers, of course—the point is that even though these two scenarios have the same number of website visitors, one of the websites gets four times as many customers.
(By the way, improving a conversion rate from 0.5% to 2% is incredibly doable in most cases.)
Improving your opt-in copy is the fastest way to grow your email list because it lets you get more leads from the traffic you already have.
This article is about how to improve your opt-in copy. You’ll learn:
- The first, crucial step to more conversions (if you don’t do this, nothing else matters)
- Why your writing is driving people away…and a 5-minute technique to fix it
- How to make your copy clearer than a freshly-cleaned magnifying glass looking at Lake Clarity
- Why benefits > features, except when features > benefits
- How to get the best copywriters in the world to write for you (for free)
Wait, first things first. Can people even find your opt-in form?
In 24 hours, my blog post sucked in 42,000 visitors. I had gone viral on Reddit, and I physically shook with excitement.
Until the dust cleared and I saw how many people converted.
How many do you think signed up? 42,000? 4,000? 400?
It was 4.
That’s a conversion rate of 0.009%. I could increase that conversion rate by 1000% and still have an email list under 100 people.
I’d broken the first rule of how to get people to opt in to your online form.
In an article about how to improve email sign-up forms, Andy Crestodina lays out three key factors:
It’s that first factor that I was missing.
The only sign-up forms on my website were in the sidebar and at the bottom of a 5,000 word article. In other words, they were too hard to find.
Oli Gardner of Unbounce found something similar in his quest to improve the conversion rate of his content.
“Out of 1,481 (desktop) visitors and 3,428 clicks, only 3 people (0.09%) clicked the sidebar CTA. More people clicked on the statement beneath the button than on the button itself.” – Oli Gardner, Unbounce
Is a sidebar opt-in form effective? Mmmm…maybe not. It’s not the worst idea to have one, but don’t expect much.
(For more information on writing landing pages that convert, check out this comprehensive guide)
A more effective approach to making your opt-in forms more prominent is to use a “content upgrade.”
Content upgrade is a term coined by Brian Dean of Backlinko. It’s when you offer a lead magnet that’s related to the specific blog post someone is reading.
This blog post about content upgrades…has a content upgrade
What makes a content upgrade different from a normal lead magnet? It’s unique to the blog post your visitors are currently reading—which means you already know they’re interested.
Content upgrades can be extremely effective. If you decide to use one, make sure you put the call to action or opt-in box relatively early in your blog post (high prominence).
One more option for prominence before we move on to opt-in copy—pop-ups.
You might see pop-ups go by a wide variety of names:
- Flash notice
- Growl notification
Technically, not all of these are quite the same. But for our purposes, any opt-in form or field that appears to your website visitors after they land on your website counts as a pop-up.
But wait! Aren’t pop-ups, like, super annoying?
Some are. Some aren’t. The thing is—pop-ups work.
When Sumo analyzed the results of 1.7 billion pop-ups, they found that even average pop-ups have a conversion rate of 3.1%.
Pop-ups work. This chart comes from the Sumo research.
If I’d had an average-performing pop-up for my 42,000 visitors, I’d have picked up a cool 1,302 subscribers—instead of, ya know, 4.
If the idea of pop-ups makes you nervous, remember that there are a few ways you can make pop-ups less annoying—without losing their effectiveness:
- Show pop-ups on scroll. Only show the pop-up after your visitors have scrolled a certain percentage of the way down the page.
- Show pop-ups after a set amount of time. Only show the pop-up after 10 seconds, 30 seconds, 60 seconds, or a time you specify.
- Show pop-ups on exit intent. Exit-intent pop-ups only trigger when a visitor goes to leave the page.
Bonus: the Sumo study actually showed that delayed pop-ups tended to convert better.
So: increase the prominence of your forms.
And then work on your opt-in copy.
Forget what you know about writing. It’s driving people away (and here’s how to fix it in 5 minutes).
“Most businesses get this horrendously wrong because they don’t consider what readers want to get out of the experience. Instead, they focus on trying to sound professional, experienced or knowledgeable – and it almost always backfires.
They “leverage” this, “synergize” that, and offer “integrated, innovative solutions” for just about everything else. They use words that no one ever says out loud, come across as stiff and wooden in the process, and have a remarkable knack for saying nothing of interest about anything.” – Mish Slade, writing in May I Have Your Attention Please
Have you ever noticed how hard it is to write about yourself?
Even if you’re usually a pretty good writer, stuff gets tricky when you sit down to write…
- A cover letter
- A personal statement or *shudder* college application essay
- A Tinder bio
- Opt-in copy for your website
When you add stakes and specific objectives to your writing, it gets harder to write. You can get so caught up in trying to sound more persuasive that you actually become less persuasive.
Half of good copywriting is forgetting all of the annoying marketing and business-y words that make messages boring.
How can you fix it? I like this advice from Anne Lamott.
“The very first thing I tell my new students on the first day of a workshop is that good writing is about telling the truth.” – Anne Lamott, writing in Bird by Bird
One of the classic books about writing (Amazon)
No, I’m not calling you a liar. Instead, I’m asking a question…
If you had to stand next to someone, face-to-face, and convince them to sign up for your email list (or download your lead magnet), how would you do it?
Here’s your 5-minute technique to writing opt-in copy that doesn’t suck.
Actually, it’s two techniques—you can pick one:
- Write, stream of consciousness, about the benefits of your email list. Don’t stop to think. Don’t hit backspace. Just type as fast as you can, as though you were writing a letter to your friend.
- Talk as though you were telling a friend about your newsletter. Record it on your phone (the Voice Memos app is free on iPhones).
Most people prefer to talk it out. Whichever you choose—remember that this isn’t the time to be polished.
What you write will be messy. It won’t be perfect.
But it will cut straight to the heart of your value proposition. And it will give you a much better starting point to apply the next three pieces of advice.
Be clear. Not clever. Clarity beats cleverness. If there’s one most important thing, it’s clarity.
“When you write a headline, get attention by picking out an important customer benefit and presenting it in a clear, bold, dramatic fashion. Avoid headlines and concepts that are cute, clever, and titillating but irrelevant. They may generate some hoopla, but they do not sell.” – Robert Bly, writing in The Copywriter’s Handbook
Puns do not get clicks.
Puns do not get downloads.
Puns do not get subscribers.
Now I loooooooove a good pun. When I whip out a joke like “plateaus are the highest form of flattery,” I crave the collective groan of the entire world (or at least the room).
But not in your opt-in copy. At least, not in the headline.
When you’re trying to get someone to give you their email address, you have seconds.
In those seconds, you need to…
- Get them to notice your offer
- Get them to want your offer
- Get them to accept your offer
And none of that will happen if you make your visitors think.
There’s a reason this is like the bible of web design (Amazon)
If your visitors need to “figure out” what you’re even offering them, they’ll move on. They have plenty of other stuff to figure out in their life. Your free ebook isn’t just at the bottom of the list—it doesn’t make it on the list at all.
That’s why puns, like this one from Illumina, fall flat.
“Covering all the bases” is a DNA pun. But it makes people think, so conversions will be DNA NONE (…sorry).
Illumina is offering a buyer’s guide to DNA sequencers. You probably won’t be surprised to hear that they also happen to sell DNA sequencers.
Contrast that example with this one, from Camille Virginia of Master Offline Dating.
Everyone can understand this. It’s simple, direct, and compelling.
True, people expect different messages from dating services and B2B equipment manufacturers.
It’s probably harder for Illumina to make strong claims like “attract a guy in under 30 seconds” (for regulatory reasons, not just because I’ve never seen anyone get a date using lab equipment).
But even in a regulated or conservative industry, you can be clear and direct.
What if Illumina said something like:
- Your guide to the top 19 DNA sequencers
- Which DNA sequencer is the best for your lab?
- This guide compares the top DNA sequencers so you don’t have to
None of these are especially exciting. All of them could be improved.
But more than anything else, these are clear. They introduce the topic, and the lab manager reading it is more likely to read what comes next.
That’s the other key insight here. Maybe someday you’ll have an incredible promise that is both electrifying and believable. A guide that prevents aging, makes your teeth straighter, and prevents the destruction of the Hindenburg.
When you have something really amazing, great! Say so. But there’s also nothing wrong with just plainly stating what you’re going to give someone.
Like this pop-up from strength and conditioning coach Eric Cressey.
9-minute video, 3-part series. Learn how to deadlift. Got it.
Cressey’s pop-up is so clear, he says most of the stuff twice. Anyone who sees this pop-up comes away knowing that:
- There’s a video
- It’s about deadlifting
Anyone who looks at it for more than a couple of seconds will know that it’s 9 minutes long and comes with a 3-part follow-up.
Even though it helps that Cressey himself has a reputation as strong deadlifter (he pulls 650+ lbs), a lot of the power of this pop-up is how direct it is.
Clarity first. Jokes are great, later. But first be clear.
Writing all the way back in 1923, the legendary copywriter Claude Hopkins said:
“Ad writers abandon their parts. They forget they are salesmen and try to be performers. Instead of sales, they seek applause.” – Claude Hopkins, writing in Scientific Advertising
To make sure your message is clear:
- State the benefit it gives your visitor
- Describe, plainly, what it actually is
Start with that, and you’ll already be well on your way to better opt-in copy—and a higher conversion rate.
Benefits beat features, except when features beat benefits
“A complete description of your product including how many pages, how many words, how many photos, who wrote it, facts about the author (his age, background, success stories, etc.). You should also take notes on what this product will do for you.” – Gary Halbert, describing his research process in The Boron Letters
If you read articles like this one, you’ll probably get the advice “sell based on benefits instead of features.”
Sometimes people prefer to say it as “sell the sizzle, not the steak.” Do a little googling and you’ll find some pretty interesting “origin stories” for this ole sayin’.
Yeah…I don’t think this is right
It’s true that you need to put benefits in your opt-in copy (that’s the “Promise” in Andy Crestodina’s “3 Ps”). But benefits alone aren’t going to cut it.
Your opt-in copy is trying to get people to give you their contact information. Which means it needs to tell them two things:
- The beneficial outcome they’re going to get
- What you are actually giving them!
Which of those two things is more important? It depends.
This opt-in form from Darya Rose of Summer Tomato has excellent copy, clearly more focused on benefits.
Clear, compelling, credible benefits.
What makes this copy effective:
- It promises a benefit that isn’t generic (a body you love without dieting)
- It uses powerfully emotional language (“get off the dieting rollercoaster”)
- It adds credibility (emphasizing Darya’s PhD)
- It sounds easy (only 3 steps, “getting healthy shouldn’t be a struggle”)
In this context, Darya plays up the benefits of her lead magnet. The features of the lead magnet are mentioned only briefly—the word “video”—but it’s enough to tell people what they’re getting.
That second point is key—even when you focus on benefits, you need to tell people what they’re getting.
The emphasis on benefits over features has made features vanish from too many websites.
It isn’t opt-in copy in the traditional sense, but take a look at this copy on the homepage of GitPrime.
What exactly does this company do?
Can you tell what GitPrime does? Sorta. You can tell what they claim to do—show you “unified software engineering progress.” And you will apparently be able to “lead with facts, not feelings.”
The page itself has a few other details, but not really enough. Interestingly, their “How it Works” page starts off with this little gem.
Now I know exactly how to help Jonathan
That’s so much better!
There’s still some room for copy improvement, but giving the lowdown on our boy Jon makes it easier to see how GitPrime can help.
Getting specific about features helps people understand how you’re helping them. It makes your benefits more believable, and it makes your offer seem more valuable.
Once again, Claude Hopkins had this figured out way back in 1923:
“The weight of an argument may often be multiplied by making it specific. Say that a tungsten lamp gives more light than a carbon and you leave some doubt. Say it gives three and one-third times the light and people realize that you have made tests and comparisons.” – Claude Hopkins, writing in Scientific Advertising
Sometimes, the benefit of a feature is self-evident.
In Hopkins’ example, you don’t need to tell people that more light is better than less light. They can infer that by the specific, persuasive detail you’ve given them.
Here’s a quick example from CopyHackers. It’s short, but it does a good job of showcasing these ideas.
I do not reject the persuasion guide
You definitely know that you’re getting a guide. You also know that it’s 172 pages long and based on 1000s of hours of research.
What are the benefits of the guide? Actionable persuasion tips. In this context, CopyHackers didn’t necessarily need to go into more detail than that—the features (long, based on research) imply its value.
Finally, CopyHackers included a picture of the guide itself.
Click around websites for a while and you’ll notice that a lot of opt-in forms have pictures of ebooks—even though there’s no actual book that matches the picture.
Showing your product is a classic conversion technique and goes all the way back to old-school direct mail campaigns. A picture of the product is in some ways the ultimate showcase of its features.
Remember—you do need to sell benefits. But if all you sell is “the sizzle,” you’re reader is going to be pretty disappointed when they don’t get a mouthful of steak.
Outsource your copywriting to the best writers in the world (for free)
“There is your audience. There is the language. There are the words that they use.” – Eugene Schwartz, writing in Breakthrough Advertising
I won’t hold you in suspense. The best writers in the world are your customers.
The problem with so much marketing writing is that someone tried to write it. As I mentioned earlier, boring, vague copy comes from people who are trying to sound persuasive—but don’t really know how to be persuasive.
Instead of writing copy for yourself, take the literal words that your customers use.
Check out this example, from the recently revamped CRM page on our website.
Sounds good to me
The conversion rate on this page went way up—but I didn’t pluck this copy from my brain without help. It was inspired by an online review of another CRM platform.
Here’s what the review said: “No more searching through emails, business cards or cell phones for numbers. Everything is in one place.”
In digging through online reviews, I found a lot of statements that were similar:
- “Keeping track of leads and setting reminders to follow-up with potential clients is maddening without the proper tools”
- “In the past, I had used more traditional methods of keeping track of my clients, such as: pen and paper, setting alarms on my phone, and trying to remind myself to consistently check in on my emails, social media accounts, voicemails, and even text messages.”
- “The biggest gripe I have with [competitor] is the lack of automation for Deals. We’re unable to copy critical info (such as lead source) from the Contact record to a Deal record, forcing our sales team to manually copy this info.”
As you can see, I didn’t necessarily take these things word for word.
But looking through customer language helped me see a few things:
- Lots of people were using a range of offline methods to track contact info
- People wanted information in one place
- For people already using CRMs, automating manual processes was important
So that left me with a subhead: “No more digging through emails, business cards, and clunky CRMs.”
And it gave me my body copy: “Manage your contacts in a central platform. Automatically update contact details and view a lead’s entire history from the contact record.”
All of that came from customer research.
Voice of customer language is irreplaceable.
Your customers might not be eloquent writers, but they know how to describe their own problems. Their words are going to be specific and emotional—two elements of great copy.
How can you let customers write your copy for you? Here are three ways to get VOC language:
- Ask them directly in interviews (these questions are a starting point)
- Survey them
- Look where they hang out online and do “review mining”
I’ve written about each of these before—if you want to learn more about writing great marketing copy, you can check out this article.
Still, let’s go through an example of review mining, so you can see just how powerful it is.
Imagine you have a business that teaches people how to start their own gardens.
I happen to know almost nothing about this topic, so I’m going to go check out the reviews of a book on Amazon.
The bible seems like a good place to start (Amazon)
The key here is to look for the places your audience is hanging out online. Amazon book reviews are usually a great bet, because there are books on most topics. Review sites, forums, Quora, and Reddit could also be good options.
Let’s take a look at the top review on this book.
So much information
Wow, that’s a lot to unpack. There’s so much gold here that can help you write better opt-in copy.
You don’t have to read it all, but here are a few things that stood out to me:
- “I’ve been gardening for a couple of years now but didn’t feel that I was really getting the hang of it as much as I could.”
- “I like how this book has provided information on how much I could plant in one area (like bunched all together and such) and different schemes of planting.”
- “Watering plants. No brainer right? Wrong! At least if you want your garden to be growing at it’s very best.”
- “Moving from another state where some vegetables grew so well to this state where those same plants struggle has been difficult.”
- “My favorite part of this book though is the glossary of information about each vegetable you’d ever even think about planting.”
- “Each page includes: the name of the vegetable, information about it, where they like to been sown and grown, seed depth, germination soil temperature, days to germination, when to sow indoors (or not to), when to sow outdoors (or not to), growing pH, growing soil temperature, spacing in beds, watering, light needed, nutrient requirements, rotation considerations, and seed longevity.”
- “Sadly, even though it showed 3 examples of vertical gardening (tepees, A-frames, homemade trellises), it only showed how to make a typical trellis. I was hoping to see how to make the A-frame one in particular.”
Not only is there a lot of great, specific language here—every one of those bullets could be a separate lead magnet!
This automation can send contacts the lead magnet that best matches their interests. You can get automations like this for free in the ActiveCampaign Marketplace. Or you can click the button to import this automation into your ActiveCampaign account right now.
If you were moving states, wouldn’t you want to know which plants will survive?
And how could you say no to “a glossary of information about every vegetable you’d ever think of planting.”
That last one could be a headline all on its own!
Not every review is a gold mine like this one, and you’ll want to look at a few more reviews during your research.
But you’d be surprised how often the perfect opt-in copy screams at you from an online review of a popular book on Amazon.
Don’t write your own copy. Outsource it to your customers—the greatest copywriters in the world for your business.
Quick hits: Fast ways to punch-up your opt-in copy
The three most important ways to improve your opt-in copy are:
- Be clear—impossible to misunderstand
- Say what you’re offering and how it will help
- Use the words your audience uses to describe their problems
Of course, there are lots of other things that can help make your copy more effective. To close things out, here are a few other points to keep in mind.
- Add emotion. Emotion makes people more likely to take action—and copy that hits on “high-activation” emotions (like awe, fear, anger, envy, etc.) can convert better
- Add specific details. “Lose weight” is less compelling than “lose 2 pounds a week.” Details make your copy more convincing.
- Use the “even if” technique. Address your audience’s key objections up front. For example “lose weight—even if you don’t know how to cook.”
- Make it sound easy. Make signing up for your offer as easy as possible. Words like “get” or “see” are lower-friction than words like “learn” or “sign up.” Please don’t say “submit.”
Bad opt-in copy is a criminally underrated cause of low conversion rates.
But if you can really nail down your copy, you can turn more of your website’s visitors into leads—and customers.